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Post by Teo on Dec 15, 2005 21:48:02 GMT -5
*Falls over KO'ed.*
*Get's back up an hour later.*
Should've put it on vibrate...why am I the only one without a phone? Oh wait, I don't have pockets...
This story is absolutely fantastic! Suspence is the key trait...
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Post by Lord of the Dance on Dec 15, 2005 23:47:37 GMT -5
THEY'LL NEVER TAKE ME ALIVE!!! XD Great job with this chapter! The suspence is killing me! *has an anxiety attack* You're a great writer! So good that I can barely type XD
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Post by Teo on Dec 16, 2005 1:18:49 GMT -5
And yet, she still has enough strength to keep typing Reminds me of an old punch line...aw well.
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Post by moshi5694 on Dec 16, 2005 6:42:51 GMT -5
Yay for pokets! This is so suspenseful! I wanna know what happens! I should make this into a sprite comic.......
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Post by Enrique on Dec 16, 2005 7:27:35 GMT -5
Don't worry, Yoshee. If they become a hastle, I'll explain the WHWP to them. XD
Great story, Leo! I can't wait to see the next part!
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Post by Leoshi on Dec 16, 2005 12:52:05 GMT -5
Thanks. and Like I said, do whatever you want, sprite comics, magna, whatever. Okay, enough waiting, here you are again:
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"Huh?" Yoshee asked. She awoke from being knocked out, only to find herself restrained. She felt cold hard ropes holding her to something. She didn't quite understand it yet, but she could feel the thing she was tied to moving.
"Where am I?" she asked. The chamber was dark with the exception of a few red lights. The sound of machinery could be heard everywhere around them.
"Is this a factory?" She asked.
"Not quite." a new voice said. Yoshee looked up and saw about four seniors standing around her.
"What did you do?" She asked.
"We brought you down to the boiler room." the senior responded. "Now tell us what you guys are up to."
"Why should I?" Yoshee asked.
"Let's see... you and that other kid are tied up, and we're surrounded by machinery that could to all sorts of things to you."
Yoshee turned her head and realized she was tied to Enrique.
"Hey, Enrique!" Yoshee shouted.
He didn't respond. He must have still of been out cold.
"So tell us. Unless you want me to introduce "Mr. Boiler" here." the senior said.
"It's none of your business. Go take a hike." Yoshee demanded.
"Well, aren't we stubborn? You want to go in a boiler instead of just telling us?" the senior asked.
"You kidnapped us, you tied us up, you threatened us. You don't deserve to know." Yoshee said. "Now untie us and leave before I get you in trouble."
"I've had enough of your annoying attitude." the senior said. They all approached Yoshee and Enrique...
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"There you are." Leo said, as he saw Lava, Teo, Yapi and Yoshifrog meet him and Yin.
"So, what's up?" Lava asked.
"We have no idea where Enrique or Yoshee are." Leo said.
"What about Moshi and John?" Yoshifrog asked.
"They are after the Principal, we'll have to do without them for now." Yin said. "So, where do you think they are?"
"Not sure." Leo said. "But hey where only taken a half hour ago, so they can't be too far."
"Then let's go find them and make them pay." Teo said confidently.
"Wait, are you sure you want in? because once you join this, you can't just leave after." Lava said.
"Yeah, I guess." Teo said.
"Me too! It's not good when someone's kidnapping students." Yapi said.
"...okay then, it's a deal. Let's try the school first." Yin said.
The group then rushed into the building.
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"What where you doing out there?!" The principal shouted.
"That's none of your concern." Moshi stated boldy. The principal got right upto her face. Moshi grimaced and backed up a little.
"Who do you think you are, talking like that to your superior?" The principal asked.
Moshi's eyes glared. "You are mistaken. You are not superior. And whatever plan you have has been foiled. Now come with me like a good little jerk and go to jail."
"I've had it with your mouth!" the principal shouted. He pushed Moshi away from him, until she collided into a wall. She got back up, with an angry expression.
"Don't make me mad." Moshi said, with a bit more sinister expression in her voice.
John stood on the other end of the room, being surrounded by the other robed ones.
"Tell us what you heard." one of them said.
"I... didn't hear anything."
"Liar!" one of them shouted, giving him a kick. John fell to the floor, panting very heavily, both in pain and anger.
"Back off." Moshi said. John looked at her.
"She certainly looks angry. ...she has an expresion... I've never seen her have before." John thought.
"I'm asking for the last time. Tell me what you know. If you don't, I'll have to resort to getting it by force." the principal said.
Moshi gave back one last angry expression. Her eyes narrowed. "Bring it on."
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Yep, that's it for now. It's kinda short, but it's all I could think of
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Post by Enrique on Dec 16, 2005 15:16:38 GMT -5
Go Moshi! XD
I can't wait to see more! You do a great job employing suspence in your stories.
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Post by moshi5694 on Dec 16, 2005 15:40:00 GMT -5
Bring it on! Bring, it, ON!!!! XD You have definitly got every detail of my charaters personality down. *stares evily* >
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Post by Teo on Dec 16, 2005 16:31:27 GMT -5
A bit low on action, but yes, still just as good. I'm such a critic! Curse you critisism! *Bricked.*
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Post by Leoshi on Dec 16, 2005 16:37:20 GMT -5
Yeah, I was kind of having a hard time thinking about this one. The next one should have more action
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Post by Teo on Dec 16, 2005 16:42:01 GMT -5
Hmmm...I can get an idea...
What if the Seniors- this should be in a PM...
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Post by UMS Author Lava on Dec 16, 2005 16:51:48 GMT -5
Shweet, the principal's head is gonna be Moshi's lunch! OK, I should be a good little boy and not talk of such morbid stuff...
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Post by Lord of the Dance on Dec 16, 2005 19:29:20 GMT -5
Haha, great job! I'd never tell, anyways. XD If I were my human self, I'd probably have forgotten what they wanted to know anyways. *bricked* Keep it up! The suspence keeps me on the edge of my seat. ^^
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Post by Johnyoshi on Dec 16, 2005 19:36:07 GMT -5
Nice Job, Leo
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Post by Yin on Dec 16, 2005 20:04:47 GMT -5
Man, I don't know how you can come up with stuff like this everyday! Yet again, and excellent job Leo!
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Post by Leoshi on Dec 19, 2005 20:45:58 GMT -5
Sorry for that delay, folks. A bit of a problem thinking about how I wanted to write this. But I have it now, so here you are:
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Yoshee was doing her best just to get on her feet, let alone break free of the rope that bound her to the unconscious Enrique. Ignoring the others coming closer and closer, she continued to shake and wiggle on the ropes.
"Face it. You can't break through." the leader of the gang said.
As Yoshee looked to the group she noticed another person standing in the room. It looked like another Yoshi, but this one was in a corner. He was in a long shirt with a strange symbol on it. His hair covered his left eye, but he right was glaring at Yoshee. The rest of his head concealed by a bandanna. He was just standing there, just watching.
Yoshee, growing exhausted, began to slow down in the struggling.
The other seniors began to laugh as they saw her breathing heavily.
Yoshee sighed and looked to Enrique. "C'mon, get up!" She shouted at him.
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The principal shouted as he flew backward. His minions gasped as he came to a crash on the floor. The principal growled and looked back up to see Moshi's wrathful expression.
"...you aren't like the others. Unlike the rest of those fools, you seem different. It's a wonder you have allied with such weaklings." The principal said.
Moshi growled. "Look here. I'm not their allies."
Johnyoshi's eyes narrowed. "Is she lying? Is she trying to fool the principal? Or is this the truth, and have we been the ones lied to? ...I can't tell whether or not this is some tactic or true fact."
Johnyoshi got to his feet. As he walked toward Moshi, he reached into his black jacket.
"What are you reaching for?" The principal asked.
John had a look of both determination and desperation. "Do you think you can afford to find out?"
The principal growled. "What are you fools just standing for!" he shouted, looking at his cloaked minions. "FIGHT!"
The group of them rushed toward the two students.
Johnyoshi ran out of the way. A few cloaked ones chased after John, but most of them headed for Moshi. She growled and held out both of her long claws.
The first one jumped her. Moshi dodged the one the minion flew overhead. She jumped back upward and grabbed the minion in mid flight. She gave the person a swing by the cloak and released. He fell screaming onto another one. Moshi watched as doors and windows opened from all directions, each revealing another three cloaked one. There must have been at least 50, all after Moshi.
"I haven't had this much fun a quite a while." Moshi said.
All of the rushed ahead and rushed Moshi. She shouted a battle cry, and held out both hands. As she didn't, dark energy began to form around her.
"You don't know who you're messing with!" she shouted, before lunging at them with everything she had...
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Yin led the search group, followed behind by Lava.
Yin managed to get far enough ahead of the group to secure her safety. She slowly lifted the bandanna off the top of her golden eye. It gave a piercing look as it scanned the area.
"...I'm not sure if I can see them, but I am sensing... something powerful lurking below." she thought. She moved the bandanna back upon her face, then stopped.
"Yin, what's going on?" Lava asked.
Yin turned to her left. "Something's through here." Yin said, motioning her head to a door.
The others where catching up.
"So... what's the deal?" Yoshifrog asked.
Yin reached for the knob-handle. She turned it and opened the doorway. Behind was a steep metallic stairwell that seemed to lead strait down into a shaft. It was almost too dark to see, accept for a strange red glow at the bottom of the staircase.
"...creepy. I don't like this." Yapi said. "But we got to go save them!"
"I get the chance to fight bad guys?" Teo asked with enthusiasm. "Count me in."
Yin held her hand to stop Teo from entering. She gave him a look. "I better go first." she said.
Teo shrugged. "Whatever."
She entered the dark shaft first. Teo came in second, followed behind Lava. Yapi ran ahead next.
"I think this is a little too scary for my tastes." Yoshifrog said.
"Do as you wish." Leoshi said.
"Well..." Yoshifrog sighed. "I don't like thinking about what's beyond here. But I don't like the thought of my friends in trouble either. I'm going."
Leoshi nodded.
Yoshifrog looked back at him. "...one question. Maybe it's a little weird to ask now, but how come I've never seen you happy?"
Leoshi sighed. "I guess it's because I'm not. But we can discuss that another time. For now, we have people to rescue."
Yoshifrog frowned. "...okay." She said. She looked down into the shaft, gave a shudder, then began to walk. Leoshi waited until she walked into the depths to follow.
"I hope I haven't made her worried. ...but I have too much at stake to worry about trivial things like this."
With that, he reached for his bag and revealed the spell book. He held it in his hands as he descended the stairs.
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"This is the last time. TELL US!" the leader shouted.
"I won't!" Yoshee shouted.
She suddenly heard a groan. She looked and saw the other one who was in the corner before, walking to wards her. Yoshee gasped. Unlike most of the seniors, this one made her truly worried. He just seemed so very intimidating.
"You fools won't get any information out of this one. She's too strong-willed for verbal threats. You have to emotionally break your victims down."
The leader senior looked offended. "Then you show us."
The one with the strange symbol on his shirt approached Yoshee and touched her forehead. Yoshee gave a gasp.
"Ah..." He said, with a smirk. "I envision one whom is very precious to you. ...bizzare, I feel the name "Champ" come to mind?"
Yoshee gasped, eyes wide. "What do you know?!"
The seniors all smirked.
"WELL?!" Yoshee asked.
"Well, how the tables have turned." the leader said. "Recall? We asked the same question to you. Now you know how it feels when you ask someone and don't get an answer."
Yoshee began to squirm faster and stronger.
"Unless you tell us right now about your little plan, we'll have our mind-reader tell us all where this precious one is and get to him."
"If you do anything to hurt Champ I swear I'll-"
"Then tell us!" the leader shouted.
Yoshee gasped. There looked to be no way out.
Suddenly, Yoshee spotted something flying through the air.
The next thing anyone knew, the leader was flying across the room. They all watched as he smacked into a wall and then the floor. His body fell unconscious as he came to a stop.. They noticed a strange-looking knife that had hit his hat. It didn't pierce through, but it knocked him down.
"That was a warning." Yin's voice said. Yoshee looked up and saw the others standing there.
"Guys!" Yoshee shouted.
Yin walked back over and picked up the knife.
"What's the meaning of this?" The mind-reading one asked.
"I should ask the same." Lava said.
"Your little plan is over." Teo stated.
"So do us all a favor and let them go." Yapi said.
Leoshi and Yoshifrog said nothing, but each of them looked to be ready on the defensive.
"I don't like the way this looks." Leoshi thought.
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Yep, that's it for now. I'll continue soon, hopefully with less of a delay next time."
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Post by Enrique on Dec 19, 2005 20:54:49 GMT -5
Ooh... I sense a big fight... Great job on this chapter, as always!
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Post by moshi5694 on Dec 19, 2005 21:04:51 GMT -5
That was well worth the wait! ^^ This is sooooo cool! Man, this gotta be the most popular FanFic ever. 0_o
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Post by Yin on Dec 19, 2005 21:06:39 GMT -5
Oh my, this is getting gooooooood... Although the weird Yoshi with the bandanna sounds familiar.
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Post by Yapi on Dec 19, 2005 22:16:10 GMT -5
...come on guys!! we have to defeat them!! haha ;D great fic Leo keep it up!!
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