I have the voice of Freedom

[Toshi]

Well, i thought i'd say that i am actually in a band (in real life), i play bass guitar, and a little while back, my good friend asked me to write a song, even though he writes songs himself, he said that i should give it a go, so anyway i finished the lyrics, but i have not thought of an actual tune to it yet. My friend is reading through a copy of it now, seeing what its like, so please read it (or sing to it) and tell me what you lot think of it!

Must say, its the first time i have ever written a song properly!

(VERSE 1)
The first time i came here
I started to worry
Thoughts going through my mind
Saying "will they like me"

(BRIDGE 1)
But my mind won't help me now
I've gotta shout out loud
So hear me out, i've gotta say that
I have the voice of Freedom

(CHORUS)
Yeah...hear me now
This voice you hear, is purely mine
Oh Yeah...hear me now
I'm not afraid, to say
I have the voice of Freedom

(QUICK GUITAR SOLO)

(VERSE 2)
I sit in the corner
no one to talk to
Tears show the pain i'm suffering
It seems no one notices
But then i wonder
Why am i bothered
'Cos i have something you dont have
So makes me different

(BRIDGE 2)
'Cos i have something unique
I've gotta tell you now
So hear me out, i've gotta say that
I have the voice of Freedom

(REPEAT CHORUS x2)
(GUITAR SOLO)

Oh...so hear me out i've gotta say that
...I have the voice of Freedom...

(REPEAT CHORUS x2, THEN REPEAT LAST LINE OF CHORUS TRIPLE BONUS MULTIPLIER ! !)

[red.yoshi]

koral toshi

[Jacobyoshi]

yep really good

[sakura]

thats awesome!!! i like write lyrics too songs too but never write them down... i should try it once ^^

[Toshi]

Well i got word of my friend, he likes them but he feels as thoug the second verse needs tidying up!

[Gene L.D. Ryoko]

whats a bridge

[Toshi]

Its a little verse that builds up momentum to the chorus!

[Aniki]

wow! very cool! good lyric ;D

correct if I'm wrong, but you're talking about when you enter in this Forum, right?
Or something like that, you write the momment when you register, when you meet everybody, and now,

Very creative ;D

and if you (of some way) you put your Music in the computer, show for us please!
I want listein it!

[joshi]

Oh hey, that is really cool! It kind of reminds me the lyrics I just deleted from my computer! Hope you can find a decent tune for it!

[Toshi]

I got one in my head at the moment!

[aquoshi]

wow thats goood i wwant to be a singer but it seems easy but its hard ;D

[Dragon]

Wow, you write great lyrics Toshi! I've tried and I personally think I suck at it. It must take days to make a paragraph! I can't wait until you're done.

[Toshi]

Well, its being delayed, as we lost our drummer, he left!

[joshi]

Toshi said:

Well, its being delayed, as we lost our drummer, he left!

The drummer left? Why would he do that?

[Pink Yoshi]

Yeah, why'd the drummer leave?

Anyway, awesome song. I like to make up songs too, but I never write the lyrics down XD And I think your friend is right. The second verse sounded kinda out there.. no offense though, its still neat.

[Fifth]

Drummers are strange, complex creatures. Who can say why he left...

Cool lyrics, but I'd have to hear 'em in action to really be able to say anything.

[Toshi]

Joshi said:

The drummer left? Why would he do that?

Well that is a total mystery to us! He just kept saying "because i want to"...might have something to do with an argument Mitch (the Lead Guitarist) and Pete (who was the drummer) had together!

Oh well, we'll find another one...i hope...