radar
New Yoshi
How can you beat me when i am this cute
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Post by radar on Oct 10, 2004 21:11:11 GMT -5
i wanna tell you i got it in a short story i was walking through the village when ran into a thife,i knocked him out, the cops took him away and thanked me. i continued walking when i steped in something slimy. when i got home i relised that i had wings. then i relized that i must had gotten yoshikenitis. i will continue the story when more happens (i don't want this to happen to me  ) |
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Post by Toshi on Oct 12, 2004 6:46:57 GMT -5
hmmm...interestin...
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Post by Yoshi4ever on Nov 5, 2004 10:09:45 GMT -5
um....i don't get it
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Post by PinkFloydYoshi on Nov 5, 2004 10:18:13 GMT -5
It makes sense to me.
Walking, Saw a theif, radar knocked him out, police came, thanked him, radar steps in something icky, he get's home, relizes he has wings, and then realizes he has yoshikenitis.
It does make sense. Well, did to me. He's just describing how he got it.
Give him credit, he might not have written any fic's before. Give him the confidence to make another.
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Post by Toshi on Nov 5, 2004 14:57:20 GMT -5
It does make sense. Well, did to me. He's just describing how he got it. Give him credit, he might not have written any fic's before. Give him the confidence to make another. He got a point! I cant write fan fics, cos i wouldnt dare  |
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Post by joshi on Nov 5, 2004 17:34:26 GMT -5
Yes, Pinky made another good point! We all have to start somewhere.  When I first started, my fan fics weren't so professional or well written, it was a bit longer though, but still awully short and poor. So I improved using "CONSTRUCTIVE CRITISM" from already experienced professional writers *coughFifthand Tehcough* |
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Post by red.yoshi on Nov 5, 2004 22:16:04 GMT -5
yea, good start if its your first. plus he said it would be short
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