Planet Yoshi's: Ch2

[Angela]

Chapter 2: Roling into Mars
- What hes name?
- He’s name is Wishy-Woshy-Toshi, but we can call him Toshi.
- Yey!
So Ratoshi and Jack start to going to M.W.P.N. house is Yoshinton. So (guess what?) they took the car and drive away to nothing they know…
And so on, Jack and Ratoshi come to the M.W.P.N. house. It was like 300 meters high!
And, right front of them, they see an light-blue yoshi.
- Hi! Ratoshi screamed.
- Schh, I think is an jerk from M.W.P.N.
- Ofcourse. An unknown voice.
The light-blue yoshi come infront of them and said:
- I’m Toshi GreatBall, and I will show your how to get to The Planets.
- Ok, I’m Ratoshi Dill, and this is my friend Jack Yoshiwa.
In the Planet room:
You have too get to Mars because some aliens are there and try to eat up the planet. And another thing, Saturn disepear about 90 hours, so I will send you to Mars, destroy the Alien called W2 and get to Saturn.
- Ok, I’m in! Ratoshi say high!
- Ok, I will send you to Mars.
to be continued...

[yro Pedward]

Wow, very nice right there!

[Gene L.D. Ryoko]

i'm still lost

you misspelled disapear

[Yin]

Okay I think I'm get it but I'm a little confused.

[Yoshee&Champ]

Woah, I'm lost now. 3 Yoshies talking, but who's saying what?

[red.yoshi]

great, but, like the rest, im a tad lost too.

[Gene L.D. Ryoko]

and learn how to spell right

[bloodoftheyoshi]

L.D. said:

i'm still lost

you misspelled disapear

XDXD and you misspelled disappear as well. But seriously, WHAT THE HELL JUST HAPPENED IN THAT FIC?

[Gene L.D. Ryoko]

darn,i could never spell that word right,thanks blood

[Lazo]

Capitalize that lone "I," my man.

You should probably slow down the stories pace. There are a lot of details that could be added to improve the strength and length of the peice.

There are some good ideas, but we need more information.

[Angela]

I'm not a F***ing USA MAN! I'm A Sweden man. I can't spell every word right!!!!!

In Sweden, we do dialoge like:

- Hejsan Roshi! sa Eoshi.
- Tjenare! sa Eoshi tillbaka.

Not:

Eoshi: I hate this.
Toshi: Meeee tooo!!

Ok, I dont keep this story, nobody llikes it and I think I'm going to do another!

[Gene L.D. Ryoko]

chill out and watch your mouth, i may be used to cuss words, but little kids are not,not every one is swedish, we can't even undrstand it so what,besides,not every one is american

[Angela]

yes

[Jacobthehero]

Awsome!

[Angela]

everybody who read this. i'm maybe not gonna continue. I dont like the story anymore. But i maybe come with another story. read "Not Another Yoshi Story"

[UMS Author Lava]

I support "Not Another Yoshi Story" and will even be patient for 3 years.
Give or take.
But even with explaining how you type it, I'm still confused.
All I know is it had something to do with Toshi.
Heh heh...Wishy-Woshy-Toshi...

Um, yeah, I noticed your gender's a girl...or so it says in the info.
I dunno if you noticed, but you might've got it on accident.

[Angela]

that with Wishy-Woshy-Toshi, it is not the REAL Toshi who is on YC. it's not him =)
But I'm not gonna do Not Another Yoshi Story. too sick on fan fics.

Sorry Everyone!! =D=D=D=D