NATE'S ADVENTURE3:GD-CHAPTER1

[nate]

~WE HAVE A STORY UPDATE~
the avatars will be coming on chapter3. very sorry..I had to go camping.....
CHAP1:GORDONS SOUL
Lava yosh:So red. Where is Nate?
Red:I found him at a grave sleeping...
Lava yosh:I hope he isn't dead...
Rad:I don't think so...Don't you agree ember?
Ember:Exactly....Wait..I heard a noise...
Nate:zzzzz....
Lava yosh:Look on top of Nate's head!
Red:hmmm..It looks like a dream cloud to me...
Lava yosh:I will check inside.. You stay here.
Red:Fine!
???:Who said that?!
Lava yosh:AHH!! I better get in Nate's dream now! *jumps in*
Rad:Great..Nate's cloud is gone.
???:Okay pepole.. show yourselves!
Ember:What do you want?
???:Oh..I thought you were a evil guy..My name is fantasy guy..what's your name?
Ember:Ember...Nice to meet you.
Rad:Mines Rad.
Red:I'm Red.
meanwhile at Nate's dream...
Lava yosh:Holy cow! This place is weird!
Nate:Take that you fool!
Lava yosh:Nate!?
Nate:Lava yosh! Glad to see you! Well, not now...Theres a robot that looks like you heading this way...
Lava yosh:What!?
Nate:Uh-oh..Here he comes!*runs away*
???:Come out Nate! Or your dead!
Lava yosh:huh?
???:Hey whats that guy? He looks like me!
Lava yosh:who are you!?
???:I am TITAN. I've came to kill Nate.
Lava yosh:What!? No way!
TITAN:Oh yes! Now get out of my way or else!
Lava yosh:*shoots ice beam* huh? It didn't effct him!
TITAN:MUHAHAHA!!! come talk to gordon. he's waiting for you.*Grabs Lava yosh*
Lava yosh:What!? Gordons here too?
TITAN:Shut up! *drops Lava yosh on a chair*
Lava yosh:Gordon! show yourself!
Gordon:And why?
Lava yosh:Gasp! Your not a yoshi, your a soul!
Gordon:heh....C'mon! Bring it on! Try to kill me!
End of chapter

[Lord of the Dance]

Suspenceful! ;D Very action-y, right at the start! Great job, Nate! Keep it up ;D

[penguinyoshi]

Nice chapter i liked it hehe jumps into dream bubble.

[Enrique]

Awesome, Nate! The suspense is killing me!

[UMS Author Lava]

Cool! You introduced Fantasy Guy!
I are H...A...P...P...Y!
And OH NO!!!
I knew Gorden would be a soul since the RP, but EEK!! A evil robot duplicate of me?!
Can't wait for the next chapter.

[red.yoshi]

sorry i didnt post to this eariler! its fantastic! great job nate!