Crystal of darkness

[Guardian]

( This is a chapter of a book I am making...)

Proluge:

On a lone island, many yoshis lived their normal lives. But, a dark secret laid underground in this safe haven. A few innocent yoshi explorers dug through the isle in hopes for valuable treasures left by their ansesters a long time ago......but they found something else....

They found a crystal with a small glittering light to it, and took it to the surface. The yoshis were all joyful that day, placing it on the pedistal they made in what seemed to be minutes. However, that night, was one soon not to be forgotten. The crystal started to shine rather oddly. Then, witha big wave of crashing sounds, what seemed to be a portal from the nether world opened, and millions of creatures spread across the world.

A family was also running with the others, untill what seemed to be a creature leading some others, appeared in front of them. The little green yoshi tried fighting, but without doubt, he didn't even harm the creature, and with one swing, the baby was sent to the other side of the isle......

( 5 years later..... )

The same baby, whom was belived lost forever, now lives in a forest south to a town which was unaffected by the crystal. Givin the nickname of "Guardian of light", he keeps the village from the same fate as the one destroyed 5 years ago. He opened his emerald necklace, and looked as his family's photo.

With a heavy sigh*, he spoke quietly " All I can hope for.... is that you are all safe somehow, like me...".....

( And thats it so far. I hope I can make this turn out good. And thanks for viewing! )

[Leoshi]

cool! I'm interested to see where this goes

[Enrique]

This looks like a good beginning to your story. I'm interested to see this story progress as well.

[Guardian]

( Thx guys.)

Chapter 1: The necklace

Someone knocked on Green's door. When he opened it, a yellow yoshi with mail in his bag, started to breathe in. " Not today.....please? " Green said with no surprise. The yellow yoshi then screamed out " PACKAGE FOR THE GUARDIAN! ". Green had one hand on the side of his head, then spoke " Do you get paid for yelling like that? One of these days, thats gonna break my eardrum!"

" I'm sorry, I just bring mail. Here you go, enjoy your day! " the yoshi said, as he ran of in the other direction. Green went back inside his house, and opened the package. Inside was a ruby necklace, just like his. Green was curious " ....This is very close to the design of my necklace!" He muttered to himself as he opened it slowly.....his family picture was inside with a note!

He was stunned....he started to read the letter:

Dear brother,
If you recive this package, please meet me at the corel beach. My only wish, is to see you alive....
From......

There was no name. " Odd, but could this really be my sister? " He wondered. Then, he could hear the village horn. Green shot to attention " Here we go again....more creatures! " he exclaimed as he grabbed his red cape, and slamed the door shut behind him. When he got there, everyone was in the evac center. Green started to count " 1,2,3,4......12 ghouls. Now THIS, might be hard. " He said to himself.

He grabbed his knife, and ran into the village. The ghouls noticed him quickly, and started to race to him. He slashed very accuratly, and easily picked of 2 of them, but now he was surrounded. " Great, how do i get myself into these things?" He said quietly to himself. Just as they all jumped for him, a huge bolt of lightning appeared and destroyed them all. Green was also hit, but was ok.

He got up, and looked to his left. A hooded yoshi was standing there and ran off after green got up. "HEY! WAIT, WHO ARE YOU?" Green shouted. The cloaked yoshi was headed for the beach. " Sister? " Green wispered.......

( Hope that part was good too, but its gonna take me time to finish the next chapter. See you then! )

[Enrique]

It's a pretty good chapter! You have some suspence in the end that make this interesting. You should continue. ^^

[Guardian]

( Here we go again)

Chapter 2: Waves of silence

Green was running in the direction the hooded yoshi was. He didn't know if it was a trap or not, but he didn't care. He just wanted to know if his sister was alive. Suddenly, he heard a tree branch snap. " Huh? " He wondered and turned around. He listened carefully to the sounds...... he could hear slime moving faster than normal. He took a step back, and then, heard more. " Darn, I forgot, monster are more powerful during the night! " He said quietly to himself.

He jumped backwards and 3 creatures ramed each other where he was just standing. They all passed away quickly. Green was, even though used to it, starting to get nervous. He continued for the beach. It took him only 15 minutes to get there, but no one was waiting for him. Then, he heard someone's voice "Well, I was hoping you would make it brother". He turned around and another green yoshi was standing there. " S-Sister!?, is that really you? " Green stumbled.

Then, he noticed something odd. Her eyes started to turn blood red. " IN YOUR DREAMS HOTSHOT " she said. Green got his knife ready. " What are you doing? " He yelled at her. Just then, a dark shadow appeared out of no where from her body, and smashed into Green. He was sent flying into a *beached* corel reef. " Ughhh....... " He moaned, then fell onto the beach, unconsious......If you were there, standing on the beach, the waves only started, when green was defeated. A storm was coming.......

( I hope i didn' make a mistake with this one.... enjoy, and I will be back with more!)

[Enrique]

You are definitely getting better. I like the element of surprise that you used. The proposed "storm" could be quite interesting too...

[Guardian]

( Well, lets see how this one works )

Chapter 3: Tornado of darkness

The village was making usual repairs after the attack. But....something was wrong. The air smelt dim and the wind was.....black??? Everyone turned to the west, and saw that the clouds were pitch black. " Whats going on? Why is everything black? Wheres the guardian? " The yoshis were yelling to the leader of the city. " Everyone relax! Whatever it is, I suggest you take shelter in your homes! " He yelled....but as he turned back...." My lord.....TAKE COVER!" he screamed and everyone started running around in panic.

Not far from the isle, a tornado was forming...but it wasn't from natuel reasons. It appeared darker than usual. After a half an hour, it made impact to the coast. It ripped though the forest, then made impact to the town. No matter where you were on the isle, you could here screams and cries for help.

The next morning.......

Green finally woke up from is unconsiousness......to find that half the isle was trashed! " What happened?....They stunned me...to kill them behind my back!" Green saod with sorrow and anger. He let out a huge cry of anger and fell to his knees. ".......the crystal......it must have done this.....just to see me suffer!" He said agrily. " It's gotta be destroyed....before the last villlage on the island is!"

Green took his cape and knife, and headed north, hoping he wasn't already too late......

( Seemed a bit shorter, but personally, this one was detailed. Let's see what I can stir up for chapter 4...)

[Enrique]

You did a good job describing the tornado and the damage resulted by it. You should continue with this; you are getting better by the chapter.

[Guardian]

( I'm glad you like it, Enrique. Now with chapter 4 )

Chapter 4: The greater forest

The greater forest is what kept green from getting to the northern town. It was a place of absulute darkness. Some said that it was the home of the netherworld portal, which keeps spreading out monsters. It was about lunchtime now, and Green didn't see anything to eat at all. The forest ued to be blessed with fruit....untill darkness took it over 5 years ago.

" Darn, if I don't find anything to eat, then time is against me. " Green muttered to himself, as he started to run. After about an hour of all running, Green had to stop. He was no-doubt, out of breath. He was coninuesly taking huge gasps, and was feeling sick now. He had over done it. He closed his eyes, and fell to the ground from exaustion.

In his dream, Green was in a cave....he could hear dripping water, and footsteps walking to the right of him..... By the looks of things, they looked like the explorers who found the crystal! " HEY! WAIT, DON'T GO IN THERE! " Green yelled, but they didn't seem to hear him. They opened the door, retrived the crystal, and went to the surface.

Green followed closely, and watched as everything that happened that day repeated itself. Green started to wonder, and headed for his old home. He watched as his family ate together, talking like every other night.....and to think, it was he last night they ate as a family. A tear went down green's eye as he saw himself try to stop the monster whom attacked them.

He woke up in the middle of the forest, where he was before. But he no longer felt hungery, but now he was determined to keep the other yoshis safe from harm. He continued down the path, and wondered if that even was a dream. Could it have been a vision?.....

( This chapter was more green viewing his past. Not much action, but I already know how chapter 5 is gonna go! So I'll see ya's next time! )

[Enrique]

This chapter is quite interesting... I'm anxious to see the next one. Just make sure that you're spelling is a little bit more accurate, and you'll be even better.

[Guardian]

( Here we go, some action in this one.... )

Chapter 5: Revenge part I

Green was almost to the northern town. All he could think of, was the safety of the others. He finally got into the clearing and saw the city......under attack! " Oh no....... " Green whispered. He ran into the city to aid the others. Many creatures were flooding the streets, and many were....well, out of this world. " T-Theres gotta be over a thousand of them!!! " He said loudly. He jumped right into the middle of the street and quickly started to reduce their numbers.

It didn't last long however, because Green was surrounded.....again. " One of these days, I gotta stop getting myself into serious danger! " He said to himself. He ducked, as 5 creatures jumped for him. They defeated each other, giving green a chance to back up a bit. Green looked to his left and saw a lone black Yoshi casting many spells to repel the monsters.

" Hold on, I'm coming! " He yelled to him. But just then, they over ran the black Yoshi. Green gave a big sigh and said " Maybe not.... ". After about half an hour, they stopped attacking. They were just standing there.....looking at green. " What the.... why have they stopped? " He wondered, as he went to the city outpost. He looked at the field, and his eyes shrunk.

" You... " He said quietly. He saw the same creature which separated him from his family making his way to the city. Green grounded his teeth together, and with great anger, he walked out onto the street. The monster looked like A huge Behemoth with sharper claws, and even meaner additude... " You will pay for what you have done demon. " Green said as he polished his knife. " You ruined my life, so now its my turn to ruin yours! " He said as he started running up to it.....

Whats gonna happen to Green? Is he making the right decision? What about anyone else that survived? ( Part 2 holds the answers... )

[Katrina]

Wow! This story has Suspence!