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Post by Gene L.D. Ryoko on Aug 12, 2005 18:17:40 GMT -5
destructive gale
calm currents
burning blaze
blinding light
dark shadows
cooling ice
rockin' earth
surging electricity
wondrous nature
mysterious time
strong steel
mystic chaos
the elements power all of life
by L.D.
you could call it a sense poem
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Post by red.yoshi on Aug 12, 2005 18:54:58 GMT -5
thats strong ld! i like the vivid descriptions.
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Post by Gene L.D. Ryoko on Aug 12, 2005 18:58:30 GMT -5
thank you red,i just feel that i improved every thing in my life
for once i'm getting good grades in school,my art is awesome,and i think i'm getting faster
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Post by red.yoshi on Aug 12, 2005 19:02:07 GMT -5
im glad you feel that way l.d.! mabye your changing = ?
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Post by yoshicreator on Aug 13, 2005 19:49:40 GMT -5
Did you get the sense poem idea from me? Just wondering! I'm not a big fan of free form (non-rhyming) poetry. I prefer that it has an easily recognizable rhyme scheme such as "ABAB" or "AABB" or "AAAA BBBB" and other similar ones to that. But nice choice of words "Gales" and "Mystic" you know good words, and I love books and poetry that uses more obscure words such as "Gale" instead of "Wind" and "Primaveral" instead of "Early Spring" and "Flaccid" instead of “soft” and “augment” instead of “increase” and “Lucrative” instead of “money making” and…well…I could go on forever, I’m a word addict and a sucker for the more interesting and rare words of our world!  I think you get my drift. So my suggestion, just to suit my tastes, but you don’t need to...and shouldn’t do this, would be to make it all rhyme without dropping any words. Just add some! But don't do that, it would ruin it, and I'm not special enough to ruin your poetry!  And I don't know if I confused you with "rhyme schemes" but I just took a literature class in school and know a good amount about poems and poem writing know! So yeah… ~*YC*~ |
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