Thy Apollo

[contention]

This poem was written as the way Shakespearen sonnets are. Unfortuantly I didn't follow the stressed unstressed pattern. But the ABABCDCDEFEFGG pattern is still used as is the 10 syllables a line. The poem is hard to explain, and if you want a wrap up its this. This person is like Apollo because they bring light, which is purity, which is warmth. Apollo guided the horses that carried the sun I believe, thus why his flames come froom hooves. This person is to far away, and by nature I can't feel them. When the night comes, they leave me and shine their beauty somewhere else (their dreams). Then their brother, the brother of purity is of course darkness and evil comes at me as I worry about them. My reigns is my soul, just fitting that in there so that line makes a bit more sense.
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Thy Apollo your flames spur from the hooves,
Of a charging Jument to set our course.
Stranded in the stars, by nature the crook,
Thou doth travel to meet amongst the source.
With the knock-knocking of the twenty four,
Down you gallop into the crystal mirror;
From where your reflection doth guide the shore,
And wipe away your brothers daunting fear.
Then he doth but grabs thy feverous reigns,
Flooding all with what is your negative;
So souls wash with all his envious pains,
Yet all does come to be but abortive.
When time will but travel without your grace,
All signs of your existence are lost in this place.

[Dragon]

If I didn't post this I probably would go crazy. I've read the poem over and over and it makes more sense each time, not to mention it's written beautifully, I don't understand why no one's replied here!! Contention, I've said it before, I'll say it again, and whether you think so or not, and it's the truth, you are a VERY gifted writer. I mean, I don't know anyone who can read Shakespear much less write a poem in old Shakespearean. Anyhow, I'm getting a bit off topic. Wonderful poem Contention, I'd love to see more, your poems flow so well and I can tell that you put maximum effort into each letter, you (believe it or not) are a great writer.

[passingthrough]

Ok so I was doing a google search on some poetry and my god... you are just... damn I honestly cant find a word that wont make you sound bad! Amazing doesnt do you justice, honestly. Where do you get the inspriation for such great writing? I review a lot of poets, both young and old, and you are honestly amazing. I really hope you know this, you can go places with your talent.

[contention]

Wow, thank you both of you two for your kind comments. Dragon, thanks for what you said; that does mean a lot. Flow? Hah, I bet you could flow your poems far easier than I ever could, I bet you could do 10X anything I could try to achieve. You have a lot of talent in that heart of yours, anything you do would turn out wonderful. This poem, still bites at me, I wish there was something I could do to it. Thanks, one who "passed through" haha, for your wonderfully kind comment. I still feel there are many things I can work on. There are many great poets out there, oh so very many who can capture only a few words with their souls and release them into our minds. It's those poets that have true talent, I can only try and never seem to truthfully succeed on what I wished for. Yet, I thank you for what you said; that means a lot to me to. Thanks for taking the time to say this as well, thats really extrodinary of you to do.

Yet, as I said there is so much that could be changed and reworked. Many see things that could be changed, yet I thank anyone who has taking the time to read this or any of my others. A mere read, if not just a notice is what makes me smile.