Poem from Hunter

[Hunter]

I wrote a poem a while back which is more like a song actually. I sang it slowly to myself and I thought it sounded fair. So yeah, my first poem to be posted on this site. *grins*

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Did I do Something Wrong?

"I love the way you are,

The way that you smile,

The way that you laugh,

I haven't seen in a while,

What happened to your hair?

It shines no more,

The clothes that you wore,

I use to adore,

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Did I do something wrong?

Is it something you do?

Please bring back the glow,

No more tears from you,

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I sat behind you,

I held you close,

I felt your heartbeat,

I missed this the most,

Now you won't let me near you,

It makes me cry for days,

I really miss you,

And your old ways,

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Did I do something wrong?

Is it something you do?

Please bring back the glow,

We belong together,

Me and you."

-end

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Yeah..*sigh* I did what I could and it came from a young cub fascinated by poetry and so sickly in love with someone that's gone. Any crits or comments is appreciated ^^ *sways tail*

[yoshark777]

That's a sad poem, But its very nice!
Great job!