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Post by Yoshiko on Jul 23, 2006 15:39:53 GMT -5
I wish you'd see everything you'd given me, but our love blinded us. Fate entertwines, crosses the lines. I wanted to say "Thank you", But then you said "I hate you". Shock, disbelief... It's all so hard to believe. I had you, you had me. What happened was a mystery. Love speaks so many words, Hearing them makes us fly like birds. Loose lips sink ships, Unspoken words are so painfully heard. Speak the two words, they bring you together, Always and forever, "I do."
...Oh, heck, I don't even know. You could just call it something off the top of my head. Yeah, I think that works best., Constructive criticism is win. Thank you~
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Post by Melon Yoshi on Jul 23, 2006 17:35:20 GMT -5
Very nice Yoshiko^^
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Sirghe
Junior Yoshi
Hi!
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Post by Sirghe on Aug 9, 2006 3:01:38 GMT -5
That's nice! You seem to have quite a bit of emotion, but then again, what normal human doesn't?
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Post by Yoshiko on Aug 9, 2006 3:43:13 GMT -5
Thanks, Melons, Sirghe. All humans have zhe emotions, yes. Sometimes it is wished that I didn't. D;
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Post by Lord of the Dance on Aug 12, 2006 12:27:53 GMT -5
I really need to read poems more often :<
Some parts seem to be slightly off-beat, but it doesn't interfere with the meaning, or reading it aloud. I like it. Good job.
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