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Post by Yoshiko on Sept 3, 2006 0:58:19 GMT -5
The dark veil of night, the subtle way of fright. Enveloping, swallowing, encompassing all that exists. Nothing can be seen, where had it all been? The veil of Darkness, the dark light. The way it causes such a blight. Darkness, darkness, all around, everywhere it is abound. A hideous, swallowing plague, there was not one we could save. The Darkness, the Darkness, all around, the Darkness, the Darkness, keeps all from found.
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Post by Lord of the Dance on Sept 3, 2006 23:53:09 GMT -5
It has a certain rhythm to it if you look hard enough. I especially like the way it rhymes. Not always, but enough to give it voice. Excellent job, 'Ko. Keep practicing, though; you haven't passed Contention yet, harhar.
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Post by Yoshiko on Sept 4, 2006 0:21:23 GMT -5
I suck at poetry. :3 So therefore, your comment was not taken in any bad way at all. :3 And Contention? NO ONE CAN SURPASS HIM. D: I didn't even ever plan to. XD I will, of course, stick very closely to my fantasy writing. I couldn't live without it.
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Post by Sirghe on Sept 4, 2006 2:49:48 GMT -5
I like this poem as well, it flows in it's own way. And I would also have to agree with the fact that NO ONE will EVER surpass Conetntion....
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