First try at poetry.

[mecharedyoshi]

This is my first try at poetry, so if you can give me any advice on how to improve it, I'll be eternally grateful.

A Yoshi went walking
All the while talking
To his friend about why
he wouldn't buy
A green lizard
without a gizzard
so, he ended up buying a pup
without a cup
instead of a lizard
without a gizzard.

How do you like it? Any suggestions on how to improve it will be as welcome to me as water is to a man that's been stranded in the desert for 3 days.

[red.yoshi]

good =). i believe the form of poetry you used is called AB format. whats great about poetry is that it can be out of this world, it doesn't have to rhyme, and it can, well, be all over the place. the author decides where the lines go, whether they require punctuation or not, whether they make sense or not. of course, something is easier to read if it isn't all over the place, but just a heads up, poetry is like a painting. keep at it, and this wasn't a bad start! no critique what-so-ever =).

[mecharedyoshi]

Thanks. ;D Now, to think of more.