The Demons Black Tulip

[goldyoshi]

This is a story i did in school, i hope everyone likes it!






The Demons Black Tulip



One day,Yoshimitsu,was crying over his dead wifes grave.He wiped the tears from his blue eyes,then,when he opend his eyes,he seen a black tulip,Yoshimitsu picked it up with his hands.He stared at the Black Tulip,then it shined a dark purple.Yoshimitsu was shocked,he took three steps back,and triped over a rock.A huge black Demon came out of the tulip,Yoshimitsu was paralysed from fear.The Demon used it powers,Yoshimitsu was now flowting!.The Demon used it powers again to open Yoshimitsus mouth,and whent down his trought.Yoshimitsu hit the floor with a thump "Ow!...Huh? What happend?" he said in total confusen.He got up from the floor,wiping off the durt off his trowsers,then Yoshimitsu hurd someone talking,he saw a man and woman walking down the path.Yoshimitsu had an urge to kill,he had seen a big bush,so he jumped into the bush,waiting...Then the man had heard russling in the bush.The man whent to see what was there,Yoshimitsu attacked the man,killed him,changed his voice to sound like him and transformed into the man,and came out of the bushes. "Dean?! Where where you?!."said the woman. (Yoshimitshu) "Oh,i just whent to see something...thats all." "Come on Samatha,lets go." he said.Then Yoshimitsu grabed Samatha,twisted her neck,and tossed her body in the near by pond.



The End

[PinkFloydYoshi]

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Edit: moved

[red.yoshi]

PinkFloydYoshi said:

This is for the fan 'Other fan fic's' forum...\

*attempts moving*
Edit: moved

um, you dont need to announce that your moving a topic if you are. atleast comment on the story if your gona post somthing...

great job bb. pretty strange, but still ok story *one thumb up*

[PinkFloydYoshi]

red.yoshi said:

um, you dont need to announce that your moving a topic if you are. atleast comment on the story if your gona post somthing...

great job bb. pretty strange, but still ok story *one thumb up*

Well, the reason I announce it's going to be moved, is to show the creator of the topic that there's a place for these things, also, by saying that I'm moving the topic, it's informing other staff who moved it and for what reason.

I wasn't particularly sure I was able to move it here since I don't moderate outside of cafe.

Back on topic though,
The character, Yoshimitsu, from the 'Tekken' series of fighting games available for the PS2 is said to be a fearless character, so him being paralysed by a demon emerging from a tulip isn't something that could happen, so unless you mean another fictional character created by yourself, it wouldn't work, heh. I guess you are when you mention 'Trousers' because I think the Yoshimitsu I'm thinking of has some sort of cyborg suit.

It ends very suddenly too. I like the idea, but usually, with a story, there's a prologue detailing the background of each character, so, why was Yoshimitsu crying over his dead wife's grave? How did the tulip come to be in front of him, also, a good epilogue too. What happened after he tossed her body into a pond? Was he caught after and apprehended later?

This is just nitpicking, but apart from that, it's a well documented passage.

Nice.

[goldyoshi]

PinkFloydYoshi said:

This is just nitpicking, but apart from that, it's a well documented passage.
Nice.

Well, this is only a story i did for fun..........I could do one about an gardian Angel and a fearless Dragon....or Draoon! ;D