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Post by Wolf67 on Mar 30, 2008 13:21:00 GMT -5
A Wolf's Life, By Garuru Wolf A wolf life won't be easy, some things might make you queezy. We Make sure for the whole pack that there is enough meat so that everyone can eat.  |
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Post by red.yoshi on Mar 30, 2008 17:08:37 GMT -5
Very nice and short. I like how you made it rhyme. Practice makes perfect, you should keep writing ^~^.
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Post by Wolf67 on Mar 30, 2008 18:51:39 GMT -5
Thanks! I will when I can
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Post by Wolf67 on Apr 3, 2008 18:12:47 GMT -5
Here's another...
He avoids all things light and bright,
before dawn breaks,
he stocks the night.
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Post by red.yoshi on Apr 4, 2008 15:52:22 GMT -5
Pretty cool. I think the word you were looking for in line three is "stalks." A little short. Maybe you should try coming up with a few of these short poems and putting them all together to make a long, interesting poem about wolves!
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Post by Wolf67 on Apr 4, 2008 22:34:49 GMT -5
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I always do mistakes like that 