Post by Yoshiken on Jul 30, 2010 19:10:21 GMT -5
I am glad to see another fan fic here on the forums ^^.
I think you did very well with the dialogue, which is a great skill to have when writing.
One critique I have though is to add more to the setting. Adding detail to the setting and the characters really helps the reader to envision the story.
I think you did very well with the dialogue, which is a great skill to have when writing.
One critique I have though is to add more to the setting. Adding detail to the setting and the characters really helps the reader to envision the story.
