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Post by moshi on Feb 12, 2006 12:48:06 GMT -5
As quoted from Yin, "A fangirl always denies(spelling?) it." XD
Interesting chapter Leo! More...... I like the way that I act twords Yin, sarcastic and like she is getting on my nerves, which is true........ FANGIRL!!!! The next thing you'll know, Yin is trying to find the treasure one piece and gets all hyper and....... okay I'll shut up now.....
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Post by Enrique on Feb 12, 2006 12:50:05 GMT -5
Yin the pirate... XD Another great chapter, Leo! Can't wait to see more of it!
You certainly act like one. XD
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Post by eloeem on Feb 12, 2006 14:24:27 GMT -5
GOOD chapters leo!! and I'M a fan boy.. no dough about it ( fan of what? XD ) anyway.. good again...
hope we don't get attacked by pirates while I sleep, DON'T WANT TO MISS ALL THE ACTION!!
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Post by moshi on Feb 12, 2006 14:33:18 GMT -5
Fan of One Piece and she can no longer hide it! =D *evil laugh*
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Post by Yoshifrog on Feb 12, 2006 15:22:38 GMT -5
You know what's sad Moshi? I took the time to read all that.
Nice job leo! =)
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Post by Leoshi on Feb 12, 2006 18:49:50 GMT -5
I read that too. very funny... yes, I don't have much to do. Alright, I'm going to get started on the next one soon, and thank you for the compliments!
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Post by Yapi on Feb 12, 2006 19:01:41 GMT -5
awesome stuff! great work Leo!! yay!! party ;D
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Post by Yoshiken on Feb 12, 2006 20:10:33 GMT -5
WOOOT! XD I loved this chapter! heck yeah ill go for a party in a ship! XD
cheers to the victory and our new ship!
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Post by UMS Author Lava on Feb 13, 2006 8:11:37 GMT -5
Yayz, we are total shweetness rulers! Heheheh, fun chapter. I give it 99 outta 100 smileys! ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D  That's an exact 100 smilies there. |
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Post by Teo on Feb 13, 2006 21:52:51 GMT -5
Oooooo... I better go to bed early... no, party... no wait, help against the evil thing, no, BED...
You're leaving me in suspence here, not that I don't ABSOLUTELY love these stories!
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Post by Leoshi on Feb 14, 2006 21:00:14 GMT -5
Sorry, I have been delaying these parts more and more lately. Sorry for not keeping them at a steady pace, I must be slacking off:
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Leo waited patiently, keeping his eyes on the ship. As it came ever closer, he could hear it moving in the water, until it's silhouette was right near them.
leoshi made sure his ship was securely anchored and stopped before leaving the controls. he looked back at the ship, to see that there were 4 crewmen on board, throwing ropes from their boat to his. It was apparent they where going to be boarded.
making sure he was silent, he hid behind the central mast. Looking back at the ship, he took a peak at the ship, for the first time realizing it was no ordinary ship. It looked like a spacecraft in a way, but it was floating on the ocean top.
"What in the world is that thing?" Leoshi asked, looking at the strange craft.
The four crewmen of the ship jumped out and walked on the deck.
"So, this is his ship?" one of them asked.
"Seems like it." another said.
"Good, let's go get him."
Leoshi gasped. "They are after me!" he thought. At least they hadn't seen him yet. He still had the element of surprise.
He opened up his book and flipped to a random page. "...Ze-Shidome?"
The confused crew looked around, trying to find out where the source of that voice was. However, their question was suddenly answered when out of the blue, a huge sphere of light was flying right at them. They all gave a collective scream before being struck by the attack. The force of the attack was enough to take them along with it, forcing them all overboard.
Both the Majestuosa and the strange ship rocked back and forth by the attack. Leoshi, now in the open, stood there, breathing heavily, blocking the entrance to the ship, and awaiting their response.
"Hey, I think we're under attack!" a voice shouted.
The four crew members threw themselves back on board the ship. It was then that Leo opened up the book yet again, awaiting their response.
"What do you want here?" Leoshi asked.
"We have come to meet the captain of the boat!" one of them said.
"You have found me, then." Leo said.
They looked confused "...What, you're the captain? Sorry, but you don't look like-"
Leoshi had heard enough. He pointed at them, ready to attack again.
"Ze-Shidome!"
They all gave shouts and screams and ran in random directions. Luckily for them, they managed to avoid the attack in their frenzy.
Leo growled and clutched the book even tighter then before. "What where you after? The book, the people?"
"...we are hear for the real captain, not you!" they shouted. "Don't make me have to attack back!"
"I assure, I am the real captain of this vessel. Now, I shall give you ten seconds to get off the Majestuosa."
Leoshi had never sounded to brave before. Perhaps it was the will to protect his friends below deck, perhaps he was afraid for the book. Whatever the matter, his fears had vanished, for the time being.
"The Majestuosa? Then this is the right ship! We are here to see Captain Lava!"
It was like a cue to the sound of a record scratching. Leo was now as confused as they where. "What? Lava is not a captain!"
"Yes he is! He told us, he's our friend!" one of them said. "Hasn't he ever told you about Treyba, Fantasy Guy, and Velvet T?"
"And L.D. Ryoko!" a fourth one added, who was a Yoshi.
"Wait, you are his friends?" Leoshi asked.
"Yes, he told me about some adventure in his messages, and that he became the captain of his own ship!" the one named Velvet T. said.
Leoshi sighed. "I think Lava was exaggerating. I am the captain, he's a crew member."
"Oh come on." Fantasy Guy said. "He wouldn't lie."
"He does stretch the truth sometimes." Treyba added.
"So, you came to see him?" Leo asked. He put away his book, relieved that he was safe. "What's wrong?"
"I came all the way from the school!" LD shouted. "After you guys left, I heard the principal was going to chase after you. Glad I beat him to ya!"
Leoshi gasped. "...oh no. The principal is coming?"
"We don't know much about him." Treyba added. "But when LD told us about it, we decided we needed to tell Lava."
Leo sighed. "And you didn't send him a message?"
"We wanted to see his ship, so we came after you guys in our gummi ship." Velvet T. said.
"...why didn't Lava tell me he had a ship?" Leoshi sighed.
"Lava is a little strange sometimes." Treyba said.
"...I'm sorry." Leoshi said. "I am a fool for attacking you. we better go and tell the others."
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"So, that jerk is coming back?" Yin asked.
"It seems like it." LD said.
"Oh great." Lava said. "This is just what we needed."
"Worse yet, he has teamed up with the worst pirate, and a demonic Yoshi Ninja." Fantasy Guy added.
"Oh no." Yapi said. "This is very bad news. What will we do?"
"And who is this pirate?" Yoshiken asked. "I can take on pirates, no problem. Who is this guy?"
"I haven't seem him before." Velvet said. "They call him Charfg. He is the cruelest pirate on this sea. He will eat you guys up and save the bones as trophies!"
"Eep!" Yoshifrog exclaimed. "We need to stay away from him! Especially if he has the Principal, and a demonic ninja!"
"...we can't." Enrique said. "According to my calculations, they will be here by morning."
Yapi sighed. "I think that if we can't run, we should fight."
"Are you crazy, Yapi?" Eloeem asked. "We could get ourselves really hurt! That's saying if this Charfg guy doesn't kill us!!"
"I don't think we have a choice." Yoshee said.
Champ nodded. <The way I see it, there is no running.>
"We have to try to prepare ourselves. We got ourselves a real battle tomorrow." Teo said.
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Short, but I tried as best as I could. Please forgive me for the length, and I will have the next one up a soon as possible. Again, Charfg is a character created by yapi, for my game. I figured that this would be a cool place to put him. Thanks, yapi!
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Post by Enrique on Feb 14, 2006 21:09:22 GMT -5
Charfg is such a funny sounding name. XD I like the suspence that you used at the end of this chapter. Keep it up, Leo!
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Post by Gene L.D. Ryoko on Feb 14, 2006 21:45:04 GMT -5
yes I appear W00T *spaz* whats scary is thats how I act in real life and I actually say ya like that  |
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Post by Yoshiken on Feb 14, 2006 21:46:48 GMT -5
AHHH!!! XD! I CANT WAIT FOR THE BATTLE!! IVE NEVER FELT SO MUCH SUSPENSE IN MY LIFE!! KEEP UP THE AWESOME WORK LEO! XD
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Post by Lord of the Dance on Feb 14, 2006 21:54:49 GMT -5
=D This is awesome. The flow of the appearances is very good, and the suspence kills me once again XD.
It wasn't too short, and I look forward to reading your chapters every day or so. You're doing a terrific job, Leo!
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Post by Yoshifrog on Feb 14, 2006 21:56:51 GMT -5
Yay, I said eep ^^
Haha, you bring up many feelings in me towards other characters. For a second I was mad at Lava XD
The suspense is a killer, I can't wait for it to finish. Seriously- you should print this out and publish it, it's really good.
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Post by Leoshi on Feb 14, 2006 22:11:23 GMT -5
That won't happen, for sure. It's too short, the gramatical errors are to severe, and all of your characters, not to mention Yoshis are copyrighted. Not now, not ever. It's fun to just write it for... you know, fun. Thanks, I'll get the next one ready
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Post by Wildfire the Dragon on Feb 14, 2006 22:21:44 GMT -5
Wow, nice Job! You should post this on Fanfiction.net if possible.
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Post by Leoshi on Feb 14, 2006 22:29:11 GMT -5
Perhaps, but I don't think it would fit under any catagory. besides, I'm already working on 3 fanfics there already
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Post by Wildfire the Dragon on Feb 14, 2006 22:40:06 GMT -5
It'll fit under Mario...And what others are you working on?
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