Twilight Fear

[Twi]

This is a fan fic of mine, currently 9 chapters (10 including prologue). Not great, my chapters are incredably short, and I don't update enough, but I hope now to get a chapter done every two days or so, try to keep to a scheduale. This has been going for months, before April the prologue was, so I thought it'd be good to submit it here. Currently, this does end, but it's a loooooooong way to get there and there may be many acts or arcs, but currently, not much has happened. There are currently 5 main characters (Toshi, Sky, Anjil, Yoshiken, Yello(all copyright to respective owners)) and there may be more, if you want to be in it, give me a PM or something, though it may be a while untill you're added, or a short time, I just don't know =D

Anywho, onto the chapters, these are what I've got so far:
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Prologue (Written March 7th 2006)
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In the quiet of the night time two yoshis walk down a half lit street. A slight breeze is blowing and whipping up the dead autumn leaves. The two friends, both different shades of blue, walk steadily towards their home at the end of the street. The light blue yoshi lags behind, his legs not as powerful as his darker blue friend. The dark blue yoshi reaches the house and enters leaving to door ajar. A faint voice only the light blue yoshi comprehends is heard on the breeze and the yoshi stops. He gingerly looks at his surrounding. Nothing of any real interest, a few bushes and shrubs but not much else. The voice is heard from behind him and he turns quickly. He is startled by the familiarity of the sound but he could not quite remember. He sets off again, first a brisk walk, then a light jog and finally a full sprint. He pants heavily, shocked and scared by the noise he had heard. The dark blue yoshi enters the hallway and notices his friend sitting on the floor near the door. “You Ok?” asks the dark blue yoshi, “you look rather frazzled.” After a long moment the other yoshi look sup to see his friend’s expression of concern. Still panting he slowly nods, still in relative shock. “Well come on then, mate. You look like you could do with a good rest.” He holds out his hand which is met by a light blue hand and is pulls the light blue yoshi up onto his feet and continues to bed. The light blue yoshi pauses for a second before following up the stairs to his own room. The thoughts of the voice race around his sub-conscious. He is sure he know it, but from where? He stays wide awake thinking about the possibilities warping his mind. He slowly phases out his thoughts and falls to sleep.
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Chapter 1 (Written April 5th 2006)
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The sound of steps from the dark blue yoshi comes down from the steps out from the main room of the house.
“G’morning bro” said the Dark blue yoshi to the light blue one standing at the work surface next to a boiling kettle.
“Hello, Toshi. Nice sleep?” replied the light blue yoshi.
“Fine thanks, Sky. What’cha making?”
“Coffee.”
“Heh, 7 cups as per usual I presume.”
“Of course.”
“Well hurry up, we’re going to the mall later. Finish it before it stops raining.”
Toshi left into the sitting room and picked up the morning paper with his large hand. Toshi was a medium to heavy built yoshi with dark blue skin. He wore black armbands and his trademark trainers which he would never leave without. He has a kind and considerate personality and will always help a fellow friend much like Sky. Sky was a smaller build but taller than Toshi. He had long flowing red hair and a scarf that, like Toshi’s shoes, would never leave without. He wore white bandages around his hands. He had a lighter blue tone of skin but, like Toshi, was kind and caring.
“Don’t worry Toshi, I’ll finish these before it stops raining, then we can go.”
As if by magic, it stopped raining at that precise moment when Sky finished his sentence.
“You were saying?” said Toshi with a sarcastic glare towards Sky.
Sky smiled back and pour his coffees into a large jug and poured it into his mouth and drunk it all without even a breath. Toshi stared in disbelief and rose to his feet.
“Take it we’re leaving?” said Sky with a slight satisfaction on his face. He walked towards the door.
“What about your hat, bro?” asked Toshi.
“My hair’s too sexy to hide.” replied Sky giggling to himself, “After you, bro.”
“Thanks”
Toshi left through the door and as Sky followed he heard the same whispers again. He turned suddenly to see if he was being followed. The whispers subsided and he cautiously left the house and chased after Toshi.
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Chapter 2 (Written April 6th 2006, contains gore)
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Toshi and Sky walk towards the large shopping mall coming into view over the hill. It was mid-afternoon and the sun was beating down on the two yoshis’ backs. They approached the mall when they heard a call from above.
“Hey! Toshi! Sky!”
Toshi and Sky looked around confused. They could not see where the voice was coming from. An angelic light blue yoshi landed before them.
“Hey guys!” said the yoshi.
“Oh hi Anjil, didn’t see you there.” Said Toshi
Anjil was a light blue yoshi with very large angel wings on her back. She spoke in a soft, gentle voice and had blue eyes. Another call was heard this time from closer to the mall entrance. It was very busy in the town and the three yoshis couldn’t quite see where the call was from. They found a red yoshi with large dragon wings standing by the entrance waving toward the three.
“Helloooo!” Shouted the red yoshi. This yoshi was tall and red. He had large dragon wings and wore a blue bandana which supported his yellow hair, “Come on, Anjil!”
“Coming, Yoshiken.” Called Anjil back, “Nice seeing you guys, I better get going. Bye.”
Anjil started to go towards the door when the ground started to rumble. The crowd of yoshis stopped and looked around. Suddenly the sky went dark and purple clouds formed around the square. The yoshis ran around screaming as the ground cracked and let out a demonic purple glow. In a flash the mall exploded with a purple flame and sent the debris in all directions which sliced and crushed passers-by. Toshi turn to see a large shard of glass cut through a green yoshi who running away. The green yoshi stood still and slowly one half slid away and his organs spewed out on the floor. His bones snapped and splintered as they were ripped from his body and the blood formed a slowly enlarging puddle which came towards Toshi.
Bodies from the now wrecked mall flew all over and people were thrown back by the force. The dead were scattered in a huge radius around the mall with shrapnel skewering, concrete splattering and organs spewed across the floor metres away from their previous owners. The few yoshis who had survived looked up at the purple hell fire and the darkened sky broken with lightning to see a dark figure with glowing eyes. The figure disappeared with a flash of light and the sky returned to normal.
The cries of the survivors for their loved ones could be heard from far away. Toshi, Sky and Anjil looked around to see if they could find anyone they could help. Anjil’s eyes turned to a vacant stare to see her beloved on the floor a few feet from her. She ran towards him with tears streaming from her eyes. Toshi and Sky follow closely behind her to see Yoshiken on the floor with various cuts and scrapes on his body. He was still breathing but clearly on the brink of life. The faint sirens could be heard coming towards the proximity of the wreckage of the mall. Anjil embraced her love as he struggled for breath. Toshi was still shaken from his sight before and Sky look around at the wasteland of the dead and heard the whispers again, this time audible.
“Come, my child. Come to me.”
This repeated itself over and over. Sky covered his ears at the noise and clenched his eyes shut.
“Err…Sky. Your leg…” said Toshi in a quivering voice.
Sky looked down at his leg to see a large piece of metal lodged into the side of his knee. He yanked it out and stared at it. IT had gone a good 2 inches into his leg. He stared and the newly formed wound which suddenly turned purple and glowed before closing shut. HE staggered back at the sight and stumbled over a stray liver. The ambulances came and escorted the dead to their cold ends.
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Chapter 3 (Written April 8th '06)
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Anjil walked down the lonely corridor of the hospital towards the now crowed ward where Yoshiken had been admitted. Following her was Toshi who had come along to see him too. They entered the now noisy room towards the end of the small, bleak room to see the red yoshi lying on his bed with all sorts of wires and equipment.
“Yoshiken!” cried Anjil as she ran towards her love.
Toshi stood back and just waved friendlily at him.
“What happened to him?” ask Toshi to the nearby doctor.
“Nothing serious, minor cuts and scraps. No breakages luckyily although he may need surgery.”
“Why so?”
“Well it seems a piece of shrapnel seems to have ripped his left lung. Nothing to serious as of now but, overtime, it will get worse. I was going to tell her but she seems upset now. I’m not sure telling her would be the safest thing at the moment.”
“Let me speak to her later.”
“That would be best.”
The doctor left to see other patients in the room. Toshi looked around the ward to see all sort of cases, all from the mall. The ward was packed and beds were being put around the corridors with more victims coming in.
A voice came over the speaker system “This is the manager of this hospital speaking. May we ask all visitors to leave due to shortage of space. We apologise for the inconvenience.”
“We’d better leave, Anjil” said Toshi.
“I suppose” replied Anjil with a quivering voice, “Goodbye, Yoshiken…”
The two yoshis left with a final wave. Anjil hugged Yoshiken and with a tear in her eye she left with Toshi.
The room fell quiet. A sudden breeze came through the window. Yoshiken turned his head towards it and saw a purple glow and a glint of metal.
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Chapter 4 (April 18th '06)
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The hospital corridors remained silent through the day. The ban on visitors during this busy time gave the hospital an eerie feel. Fast footsteps echoed down the hallway as Anjil ran towards the ward Yoshiken was being treated. She ran in to see doctors and nurses around the area where he was.
“What’s happened?” Anjil asked frantically, looking at an empty bed, Her face dropped at the sight of the empty bed, “Where on earth is he?”
“We don’t know, we came to check up and…”
“WHAT DO YOU MEAN YOU DON’T KNOW? YOU WERE TREATING HIM! HOW COULD HE DISAPPEAR?” Anjil shouted angrily.
“We’re sorry, we don’t know how it happened or when, but he is gone. He couldn’t have gotten far with his injuries, though. We have search teams looking at an area around the hospital. We believe he escaped through the window.”
“How did he escape through the bloody window? WE’RE ON THE 5TH FLOOR!”
“We’re sorry, it’s….”
“That’s all you can say isn’t it? Sorry. Why don’t you stop talking and find him!” With these words she ran out the room with tears in her eyes. He sobs echoed around the 5th floor, then silence.
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Chapter 5 (May 5th)
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Toshi and Sky were walking along a path through a suburb of Yoshi’s Island. It seemed a nice day; the sun was shining with some clouds in the sky. The pair of yoshi’s were talking about the previous events, both still in mild shock about what had happened. As they walked past the hospital Anjil burst through the doors and fell to the floor in clear distress. Toshi and Sky ran to her aid and realised she was crying.
“What’s wrong Anjil?” asked Toshi as he helped her onto her feet.
“You ok?” asked Sky simultaneously as he also helped.
Anjil was still crying but managed to stutter out a few words.
“Y..y…oshiken…..is m…missing…”
Sky and Toshi looked at each other is horror at the news. They help Anjil to a nearby bench and comforted her. Sky suddenly jerked his head up and looked dead ahead at the forest opposite them. He stood up and kept staring at the forest.
“Sky? Yo, bro!” Toshi said to him with no reply, “Dude what are you staring at?”
Toshi looked in the same direction as Sky and saw a dark figure and two what seemed to be glowing lights.
“What is that?” asked Anjil, who was now staring at the figure.
“I don’t know, what do you think Sky…Sky?” Toshi looked towards Sky’s original position to see he had gone. He looked up and saw Sky running towards the figure.
“Hey! Wait up!” called Toshi after him. Toshi began to chase Sky and Anjil followed.
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Chapter 6 (June 9th)
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As Anjil and Toshi ran into the forest, they paused to look for Sky.

“Where is he?” asked Toshi frantically.
“I don’t know, he can’t have gotten far.”

Toshi ran deeper into the forest, Sky still no-where to be seen. He kept running through the forest, Anjil following behind. Toshi was slowly going further and further ahead of Anjil though the thick forest.

”Toshi! Wait!” Shouted Anjil to the blue yoshi who was almost out of sight. He could not be seen now, and the called had not been heard. Anjil looked around at the trees, she could see nothing but darkness. She walked slowly forward but paused in a small clearing. It had a pond in the middle where a small yellow yoshi was sitting on a rock, fishing. The yellow yoshi turned,

“Oh, hello.” Said the yellow yoshi.
“Hi there. You wouldn’t have happened to see two blue yoshis run past have you?”
“Erm...I heard some running going down there, but I didn’t see them, I was too busy fishing.” The yoshi smiled when he mentioned fishing.
“Ok, could you help me find them? It’s important.”
“Errrr…ok, sure.” The young yoshi hopped down from the rock and went over to Anjil, “My name’s Yello, nice to meet you”
“Heh, nice name for a Yellow yoshi. I’m Anjil.”
“Hehe, nice name for an Angel yoshi.”

Yello and Anjil went down through the woods at the left of the pond to find Toshi and Sky.
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Chapter 7 (July 4th)
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Toshi ran into a clearing in the forest. He looked around and saw a lake and a rock. As he walked up the rock he noticed a small fishing rod there. It was quiet. He stopped and looked around to see if he could see Sky.
“Crap! I’ve just been here! Where the hell has he gone?”
Toshi walked around the lake slowly, carefully listening out for any hints of another yoshi. Suddenly there was a rustling in the trees to the left of him. He turns sharply and stares at the trees, waiting for something to come. A red winged yoshi emerges. The yoshi has yellow hair and what seems to be a blue bandana. His eyes were not the normal white but instead they were glowing a dark purple.
“Yoshiken?” said Toshi nervously to the red yoshi.
There was no reply. Yoshiken just stared at Toshi, and Toshi stared back. There they stood, staring. Behind Toshi there were footsteps. Toshi turned to see Sky emerge from the thicket behind him.
“Sky! Where did you go?”
“Sorry, he looked like the guy at the mall, but he got away…is that Yoshiken?” Sky now stared at Yoshiken, and Yoshiken stared back.
“I dunno, Bro.” Replied Toshi, “But he sure as hell ain’t as lively as he was.
Yoshiken took a step back and pulled out his katana.
“Erm…Toshi, time to run?”
“…I think so”.
Toshi and Sky run back around the lake. Yoshiken closely charged at them ready to attack.
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Chapter 8 (July 17th)
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A cry of terror was heard from afar which caught Anjil and Yello’s interest. The both stopped walking and turned sharply towards the noise.
“What was that?” asked Yello
“No idea, but it’s coming from over there, maybe it’s the others! C’mon”
Anjil and Yello started to run towards the source of the noise. The noise soon turned from screams to the clashing of metal. This sound worried Anjil as she started to run faster.
Meanwhile at the lake, Sky and Toshi stared at the pursuing Yoshiken. Both Sky and Toshi had their weapons out. Sky, his trusty Kunai along his wrist and Toshi with his infamous Zeco. Yoshiken had stopped and was staring at Toshi and Sky with his blackened eyes. As the 3 yoshis stared each other down, a faint shout was heard from the forest as well as light footsteps.
“Sky? Toshi?” shouted Anjil.
Yoshiken turned sharply towards the shout. Toshi and Sky took their chances and tried to grab Yoshiken, only to have their weapons blocked by the flaming Katana. Yoshiken leaped back before charging back and took a swing at Toshi. Toshi easily blocked and attempted a counter, but that was blocked. Sky came in with a big leap and threw two Kunai at Yoshiken. Yoshiekn managed to roll out the way of this and leap back into the fight and took a stab at Sky. This was blocked, but the force of the hit was sent Sky sliding back.
Faint whispers suddenly came out of nowhere and came from an position seemingly moving. Yoshiken put away his weapon and fled through the forest. The whispers stopped and Toshi and Sky were left standing with their weapons out.
“Sky! Toshi! What happened?” asked Anjil trying to catch her breath.
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Chapter 9 (August 28th)
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Anjil stood still puzzled at why both Toshi and Sky had their weapons out with Yello beside her, with a similarly puzzled face.
“Yoshiken was here, but he was different, he tried to attack us and was really angry or something..” Toshi said panting.
“Yoshiken?! Which way did he go?!”
Toshi wearily pointed directly in front of him, “Don’t think of going, he was far too fast, and I haven’t a clue what’s there, could be anything, there were these whispers.”
The four yoshis stared into the depths of the forest in wonder at what may be in there. What were the whispers? What was up with Yoshiken? What the hell is going on?
“I can’t just stand here and do nothing!” shouted Anjil.
“Well what CAN we do? We have no idea what we’re up against here, could be anything!” replied Toshi.
“So what do you suggest?” said Sky.
“Go back to town, get help or find any information that we can on whatever this thing is.” Replied Toshi again, “if we know what we’re doing, we can get be more prepared.”
The four yoshis came out of the forest and returned to their homes. It was getting late and the sun was starting to set over the horizon. As they approached Anjil’s house, they parted ways, Anjil returning to a lonely home again. Toshi and Sky went on to their own home, leaving Yello behind outside Anjil’s house.
Yello stood still and turned towards the door of Anjil and knocked. He hoped he’d be able to sleep there for that night, realising he had nowhere to stay. Anjil opened the door and let Yello in.
They would all wait until tomorrow to know what was going on, but it was a wait they were willing to have.
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[Yoshiken]

The chapter are great! They are short, but it has little affect on the awesome plot devices used.

The fight scenes were awesome too XD.

[plebanshiren]

ahh, now I know what's going, (I've finally managed to read em all).
the first chapter was a little...graphical (gory as hell, yoshi guts ><!!) i feel sorry for all the dead yoshis =(
But it was a very good story so far, I can't wait to see the rest ^^ good job!

[Twi]

Yes I have tendancy to make the gorey scenes graphic, chapter 2 (the mall death scene) is my longest, it's 600 words or something.
I'm twisted, but it's fun =D

[Lord of the Dance]

It's got a lot of violence, but it makes sense for the storyline.

Gah, I can see it too well. That's good, but it can be bad sometimes, heheh. You go into a lot of detail.

[Stevoshi]

You have an exciting start to what seems to be a very promising story! The 2nd chapter was a little sad with all of those Yoshis (is that the correct way of making Yoshi plural?) dying, and I wonder what has happened to Yoshiken? Great suspense, standing by for more!

[Twi]

Hello peoples, another chapter for y'all to get readin.

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Chapter 10 (1/9/06)
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It was a very hot night that night and Sky was tossing and turning in the uncomfortable heat, nothing could make him sleep. His window was wide open but there was, unfortunately, no breeze that night. Sky opened his eyes and looked at his bedside clock, it was 1.44am. ‘Ugh…jeez,’ thought Sky.
He tried closing his eyes again, trying to get as much sleep before he would wake up again. The sweat was pouring off Sky in buckets and he kept tossing and turning without any sleep. He looked at the clock again, 1.46am. The breeze started to pick up, just slightly at first, anything to cool down Sky. The breeze picked up more, the curtains started to flap in the wind. Sky found this comfortable and tried to get back to sleep.
The breeze got stronger and stronger, now it was so strong it was almost ripping the curtains off the rail. Sky got up yet again, looked at the clock, it was now 1.48 am. He looked at the window and sat up. There was a dark figure, crouching in the open window. Sky was startled and stared at it. There were what seemed to be two purple lights in his head. It was the same figure he saw in the forest now but 5 feet away from his, staring emotionlessly at him. There were caught staring at each other. The dark figure had some sort of cape which was also flapping around, revealing a mutated claw of sorts.
The dark figure closed his eyes and fell backwards off the window. Sky rushed to see where he went, and the dark figure had gone. Sky wasn’t just going to idly stand by, and picked up his coat, put on some shoes and took some kunai and lept out of the window, rolling when he reached the ground. He ran straight ahead into the night, hoping to find the figure once more.
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It'd be nice to see some more characters here, if you'd like to join, for either a cameo or a major part, PM or IM me, I'm always looking for more people. The more people, I think the longer this could go on for.
Thank you and, for now, adios!

[Leoshi]

I'm rather impressed by your work. A little gory toward the begining, but I guess it works for a surprise element. I wonder what's become of Yoshiken... hm, quite mysterious. I must read more, when you write it. Oh, and I guess, if you have extra space, would you mind including me? I really have no set preference for how you would include me. However, if you really need one, let me know, and I can make up something. Thanks again!

[Lord of the Dance]

This chapter created a lot of suspence, now, haha. I would like to see where this is going. Your imagery is also still right-on, which is great. The personality of Sky really comes through then, too.

[Twi]

Leo: Sure, i'd love to add ya as a character, thanks for the interest =D

A new chapter should be coming soon, but it's a long chapter, so It may be later tonight or tomorrow it'll come, thanks for reading my fanfic, muchly appreciated =D

[contention]

Aye there buddy, there is something about your story that has always caught eye; no matter how much time you spend on it. Especially from the point of which you began, and how far you have run into this point. You haven't given up on anything, especially such skills; for you keep them by your sides, and with every motion you process more. You're a machine there Twi Guy, and you never let the gears fall apart. It's that, with so much more inside of what you are; that comes to form you as a writer and that of a higher level. The choice of words of which you spare, are more than just dead on for what an article could be preformed within. It's as if the blood of your language flows greatly in the stream of your veins, as each and every syllable seems to draw closer to the ever forming and building plot. Your friends around, so it seems; enjoy more than what you know of what you bring down. For you express them as is seen in your perception; thus, it is a label of your friendship and the bounty of your knowledge within their characters. Believe it or not, that takes a lot of stride and patience to maintain, yet you do it like none other can. While you might use the creations of those around you, there is that of which you place them correctly. Your ability to not misconstrue their attitudes, and to manipulate them to what areas you find to be must appropriate. You've spoken before, of your love to bring these out, and with each and every evolving chapter you keep the pace growing and beating.

As many have implied there is something about your imagery that seperates you from the rest of the crowd. Your shapes and sizes definetly place you within a class of your own. You never fall off the scale, and you keep up your choice of structure to the greatest portion. It's that which keeps the lines flowing, and never broken down at the slightest. There are many areas that you grasp and scheme to every possible altitude. It's amazing, in the realism that you breathe beside your attitude and comfort. This is what makes you a writer, you have the ability to draw your crowd in and keep them at the most intrigued relationship with what you put down. Many don't seem to understand this when they display a story, but you above everything have never let that justice fall down. Still, every chance any can get, all eyes do come across your gracious chapters. Becoming locked in an ever swirling tundra of your imagery and graces; defining what art is, seems humanly impossible: yet your story falls right into what ever it could come as in definition.

Never give up on what you bring here Twi Guy, and don't let anything ever make you feel out of seat. The life you live is one so many see and smile upon. It is within these chapters, these segments that you don't only reel us in. You keep us living and feeding off of what you supply; you are a master in your script and a key composer to the soul. With your choice of figure, stature, and model: there is not one piece of you that could ever be taken out of socket or tied beneath the ledge. You are that which stands on the highest cliff, giving off the wisdom; from the bounty of all in which you are.

[Twi]

Roflohnoes another chapter! New character!

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Chapter 11(3/2/06)
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“Yo! Sky! Get up, we’re late meeting Anjil.” Shouted Toshi as he ran across the landing in his slippers, “Sky?” he knocked on the door, “Sky! Damn it, man! We need to get goin’!” Toshi opened the door to Sky’s room, “Sky?”
He saw the empty bed and the open window with the curtains waving gently in the breeze, “Ah crap...”
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“So Sky’s gone AGAIN? What’s up with him lately?”
“No idea, but for now, he’ll have to look after himself, I’m sure he’ll be fine. If we find out what is happening to Yoshiken, I think we can find Sky.”
Anjil and Toshi walked into a large library and looked around, shelves stacked full of potentially useful information.
“So…what exactly are we looking to search?” asked Toshi.
“Erm…oh…yeah I dunno.”
“Let’s systematically look through every book for information…”
“No need for sarcasm, we can find the right section. Just look for something like “evil” or “myths and legends” or something.”
“Looking for something, bro?”
Toshi jumped and turned around to see a green dragon with glasses, about 5 foot 4 inches high and had white head spikes and two lightning shaped horns.
“Gar! Heya, mate!” said Toshi after realising who it was.
“Hi, bro. What you up to.”
“The usual looking through books to find out information about an unknown…something.”
“The mall incident and why Yoshiken’s gone all gaga?”
“Erm…yeah pretty much.”
“I came to investigate that too, after hearing about Yoshiken going missing and the mall exploding, gave me a chance to get a head start in helping defeat this, whatever it is.”
“Found anything?” interrupted Anjil.
“This one book I found, here.”
Gar handed Toshi an old book, quite large, entitled “The Twilight Project.” The book was made of a hard leather cover and the pages were tattered and some writing illegible.
“I found it just lying around in the myths and legends section. It’s quite an interesting read, and it seems to fit with what’s going on, if it is indeed real.”
Toshi opened the first page and started reading the faint letters, “Jeez, this is impossible, I need glasses or something.”
“Basically it’s about some creation from an undefined time in “Xenerex”, be that an old country or a town or I don’t know. But apparently there was a creation for an evil cult for some sort of monster to crush enemies, then the creation escaped, it’s a diary of the experiment by one of the creators who escaped and told what was going on. There were 6 others, but if there were, we have a problem.”
“But is this even right? Where’s the evidence?” asked Toshi.
“The explosion at the mall was described exactly here.” Replied Gar.
“That’s good enough. So what now?”
“More reading, get more info.”
“Argh, son of a bi—“
Anjil whacked Toshi round the back of his head, “Language…”
“Sorry, I just don’t like reading. Maybe you two should stay here, I’ll go look for Sky.”
“What?!” Gar suddently perked up, “Sky’s missing?!”
“Yeah he must’ve left last night, but he couldn’t have gone far.”
“No, I’ll go, I can fly and so I’d have more a chance of finding him, you two stay here, I’ll be back.” With that, Gar ran out the library and took off, his slowly fading figure going off into the horizon.
“You just want me to read you bast—“
Another clip round the back of the head from Anjil, signalling another curse.
“Sorry..”
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Yep, enjoy! All those who have requested involvment, you will be added sometime, if you want to be in it, you can still contact me, I'll probably stop accepting them after a while so it's not crazy for this act.

G'night!

[Lord of the Dance]

The details are very well-written yet again, Twi. I like how Anjil slaps Toshi every time he curses, haha.
To add more emphasis, you can use italics as well as capitals. It adds some more emotion, I've found.

[Anjil]

Hojeez, this is awesome! Yeah, the second chapter is pretty graphic. Those poor Yoshis! D: But the fight scenes are cool. Likin' that action! Hahah, and I laughed when when I clipped Toshi for cursing. XD Oh, and thanks for including me, Twi! Can't wait to see what happens next!

Wow... March 7th? Have you posted these over at dA? Argh, now I feel bad for overlooking 'em! D:

[Twi]

anjilyoshi said:

Wow... March 7th? Have you posted these over at dA? Argh, now I feel bad for overlooking 'em! D:

Yes, they're on DA, I decided to move them here for some reason, glad you enjoy them =D

[Yoshiken]

Wow, this is all awesome! XD. The fight scenes are very detailed and the story has many twists that add suspense ^^.

keep em coming!

[Twi]

A NEW CHAPTER! All characters who wanted in are now in, still accepting, so PM, IM, whatever if you want to participate =D

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Chapter 12 (17/9/06)
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“I hate reading, I’d much prefer to fight and get out there.” Said Toshi
“Quiet, we gotta do this, and when we do we can go find this thing, whatever it is.” Replied Anjil, in a hurry to find books, “Now what section would this be in?”
“How about the fiction section? Hehe.”
“If you’re wondering about the mall incident, I can help.”
The voice started Anjil and Toshi as they looked around. They saw a younger yoshi, only by a year or two than themselves. This Yoshi had light blue skin with brown, messy hair and wearing glasses, holding a rather large and old book.
“Hello there, who are you?” asked Anjil.
“I’m Leoshi, I was overhearing your convosation with the dragon and was just coincidently looking for the answer myself, I think this book may help.”
“Oh, thank you very much, Leoshi.”
“No problem.”
Anjil looked at the book entitled “The Twilight Myth” and she opened the book to the first page where a large cresent moon was seen. With the book Leoshi gave her and the diary Gar had found, they had a lot of information now to know what this thing may be.
Gar stood on the roof of Toshi and Sky’s house and looked in the direction he thought Sky would have run to. He leaped off the roof and spread his wings to slow the landing and ran in the general direction, feeling a faint sense evil on the way. Many thoughts ran through Gar’s mind: Was Sky okay, what is this evil thing and why was Sky wanting to follow it so much.
Gar was quite a way out of the main city, but instead running through narrow passageways in a suburb. Gar paused a second to get his bearings, but suddenly heard the clashing of metal. He ran through another alley and into the street and looked in the direction of the sound. There were three yoshis. A green, female yoshi with white shoes and a tennis racket on the floor. She was lying by a tree, seemingly in pain, grabbing her ankle. The other two were fighting, one with a hammer, royal blue skin and light brown hair. He wore black leather gloves. The other yoshi was red with a blue headband and yellow hair. Yoshiken again. Gar decided to help and drew his sword and ran towards the battle.
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Thar! Hopefully I can get about 2 chapters a week, and not 1 every 16.583 days D=

[Lord of the Dance]

Nice, heheh. We come in fighting =D

Great job so far. Your imagery still paints a picture, and the story is very interesting.

You missed a few commas here and there, but there wasn't any problem with understanding what was going on.

[Yoshiken]

look at me go XD, im on a rampage ^^. A hammer can't beat a katana, its common physics XD.

Awesome chapter Twi! The story flows greatly ^^, you have a lot of talent within you!

watch those grammar errors tho ^^.

[Twi]

yoshiken said:

watch those grammar errors tho ^^.

yosheechamp said:

You missed a few commas here and there

GRAMMER IS FOR LOSERS! *falls to the mighty God of grammer and is smited*